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The Intriguing Twilight

The sky gave us his golden light
and it shines with heavens might
through the sun's Lens evening is golden
the soft glowing light brightens and stolen

the normal atmosphere and with a shutdown
below the horizon, the rays smiles as a clown
shining towards the deep sea, with reflection
painting here and there, as an addiction

whatever the sun rays brings out
whether any color or thereabout
the twilight is always beautiful
even the reflection is not harmful

we must embrace the habit of this sun rays
'cause, at this timeout, the sun rays lays
his light down to earth and shines
like summer travels to other climes

© Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu
Nigeria
31/01/2022

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Haven't seen this very often on poems. you cover it very nicely. it's a good piece, would work well in a book of your verse.

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Good read. I'm happy you read through.

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