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INTIMATE

There across the street from me
a window, curtains seldom closed
living room displayed for all to see
all within fully exposed.

An old couple living their lives there.
They have company...maybe once a week.
Her head is white, his almost bare.
Though no voyeur I sometimes peek.

Their T.V. by chance faces the street,
their chairs and sofa in plain view
through that picture window clean and neat
showing all, in that room, they might do.

Most evenings the T.V. is on
wife and husband in their favorite chair
watching shows maybe remarking upon
the programs at which they both stare.

But tonight the screen is solid black
yet they still sit and even smile
exchanging glances forth and back,
feet and fingers tapping all the while.

I deduce their stereo is playing
with vinyl records from long ago
when you could still tell what singers were saying
in verses all us old folks know.

Then he arises holding out his hand.
She smiles and rises to her feet
old hips barely swaying to the band.
They embrace and dance to a slow beat.

I blink then turn my gaze away
as I feel a blush spread over me
then I close my curtains and turn away.
Some things are far too intimate to see.

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lovely observation of life Scribbler, well put. Best wishes Tim

long time no see lol. Thanks for dropping by and leaving such kind comment......stan

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this one, on a level that exceeds the usual pleasure that I get from reading one of your poems.
It takes a person that has lived a lot of life to be aware of the significance of the little vignette that plays out here. I love the silence that lends an air of privacy and your reaction to the intimacy of the scene. Great stuff! ~ Gee.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Sometimes I pass along something other than observations of nature just to show I Am capable of doing so lol. And you're right about how the little things become more precious as the years add up. Thanks for the visit and I'm pleased you like this...........stan

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A lovely cameo.
Doesn't feel voyeuristic, until they start dancing......
I enjoyed this, don't want to crit.
Jx

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Intimacies Don't always have to involve sex do they? Thanks for the time to visit.......stan

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That's beautiful. Knowing when to stop peering in is
a beautiful thing too....

Thank you. Yes there Are things other than sex and nudity that are best to remain private. Appreciate your dropping by.......stan

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he was very, very good.

A lovely, gentle insight into intimacy.
You should probably write a text on the effective breaking of prosodic 'rules'. No crit.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

Thank you. Writing on a subject like this can be difficult. Too easy to be either trite or too obscure in message. nice to know I did well this time lol. Before writing any text on breaking rule I need to learn those rule a bit better .........stan

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Nice one Scribbler. Privacy!!!! I'm new on here tho I'd like us have some chat

Always good to hear from a new member. I'm pleased you enjoyed this one and you are welcome to send me a private message any time you want. Might take a while for me to answer it lol. If you need help navigating site just ask me or any other member and welcome to neopoet.........stan

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