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The Inner Strength

All parts of my life
I grappled and struggled
Feeling powerless and helpless
I struggle to break free
From humans sucking my blood
Draining my spirit
And feelings of emptiness
Yet I break free and move

Afraid to tell someone of what I experience
In fear no one believes, in fear of ridicule
In fear of being stigmatized
Yet, I break free and move

His hand clamped on my mouth
In a rage to mute my screams
The torture wearied into the lonely night
The violation of my space
An invasion of my privacy
My body, my skin, the bruises
Bore marks of all the losses
Of wasteless years and profanity
Yet, I break free and move!

We can all break free and move
Stand inside your skin and seek the cry for help
Love yourself and know your worth
Live just to own your triumph
Live just to own your story
Live and recreate your glory
Live! and break free
Because your life depends on it.

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And genuine as usual.

Afraid to tell someone what I experience;
In fear no one believes, in fear of ridicule;

Just some grammatical correction. I’ve no other suggestions. You’re usually pretty organized by the time you post it. You definitely tell a story with most of your pieces. And the end of the story is usually the beginning of a new one. A brighter one. I admire your bravery and your writing.

Tim

Hi Tim thank you for taking the time to read this piece. will certainly make the correction. Your inspiring comments truly always encourage me. Thank you for the support.

Candice Vitalien
"Keep glowing even if no one can see your light.
For among the hidden stars on the darkest night
Someone will look up and behold
The flickering hope; words untold;
Strength and Honour my Warriors! "

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So I just went back for second helping.

“Love yourself and know your worth;
Live just to own your triumph;
Live just to own your story;
Live and recreate your glory;
Live! and break free
because your life depends on it.”

I would break that last line up. When I read it “Live and break free” is the anchor of that stanza and the confirmation “because your life depends on it” is the finish.
Let me say, this is the best stanza I’ve read from you. I feel like this is bestselling caliber poetry.

I saw a post the other day on social app that.challenged men to name one woman they weren’t romantically involved with or related to that they admired and why. I chose Emily Dickinson and as a bonus Gina Gleason (guitarist, singer, songwriter and lyricist). You could be on that list. I’m really impressed with your resilience. Excellent job on this poem.

Stand in strength and glory.
You are a warrior,
Tim

Hi Tim, thank you for the grammatical edits and changes. Yes, it reads better indeed in that stanza. Thank you for holding me in the list of categories of names. My resilience bore fruit with force and sadness but in the end, it made me stronger, a work in progress.

Candice Vitalien
"Keep glowing even if no one can see your light.
For among the hidden stars on the darkest night
Someone will look up and behold
The flickering hope; words untold;
Strength and Honour my Warriors! "

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This is one of your finest poetry I have ever read. You've brilliantly weaved words in expressive mood. Your poetry is simply 'a compendium of life notes'!

You had severally experienced a hazardous situations in a life time. Your dictions speaks more of this experiences. I truly believed you've jerked back to life. You're no longer been oppressed. At this time, you're refecting the past time of life that struck on you. From depression to hope. You new dawn awaits you!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Hi Jackweb, thank you for taking the time to read this piece. You are correct in what you have interpreted in this piece. I am no longer oppressed, but my wings have grown and I am flying free and just reflecting on my journey ahead, Can I pick up another and journey with them? Yes I can as helping someone is my goal. Thank you for the encouraging words,

Candice Vitalien
"Keep glowing even if no one can see your light.
For among the hidden stars on the darkest night
Someone will look up and behold
The flickering hope; words untold;
Strength and Honour my Warriors! "

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I feel like we are sisters in pain and victory.

*I salute you, Cat

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Candlewitch I agree as your pain and struggles and journey in your life, I can resonate. Thank you for taking the time to read this piece. I would like to read your books in time to come..so glad I met all of you'll on Neopoet Community. Your support goes a long way and is most appreciated. Kindness and encouraging words never go out of style.

Candice Vitalien
"Keep glowing even if no one can see your light.
For among the hidden stars on the darkest night
Someone will look up and behold
The flickering hope; words untold;
Strength and Honour my Warriors! "

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