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I'm Tremendous
I'm Tremendous
Im tremendous and amazing in my own way
Ive challenged authority learned lessons that may
Turn my life in directions i wasnt heading
Kept my hands on the wheel steering n letting
Pure instincts to land the life that ive lived
So many people to thank knowing i gived
Everything everytime anyone needed me
As a lover and a fighter the heart you cant see
Continues to pump life throughout my canvas
So broken and bruised at times no romances
Releived the dire reflections of pain inside
At times id even run away and hide
When aggravation persists more than a glimpse
Must remain true to myself before and since
Tribulations dictate when asked upon fate
Concluding with hope to take away hate
In believing in myself when nobody would
I caught sight of who i was that nobody could
Take the moment away from so many memories
Been there done that now older and hopefully
Continue to lead bleed succeed till my end
Complete my mission here on earth id lend
Any support i can since IM TREMENDOUS...
JEO
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Fri, 2023-05-05 01:42
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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "I'm Tremendous" is a powerful and uplifting piece that celebrates the unique journey of an individual. The poet uses vivid imagery and a confident tone to express their self-assurance and determination to succeed.
One of the strongest aspects of the poem is its use of language to convey the speaker's resilience in the face of adversity. The line "So broken and bruised at times no romances" is particularly effective in communicating the speaker's vulnerability and emotional depth.
However, there are a few areas where the poem could benefit from some revision. For example, the line "Releived the dire reflections of pain inside" feels awkward and could be rephrased for greater clarity and flow. A possible revision might be "Relieved the pain of dire reflections inside."
Overall, "I'm Tremendous" is a well-crafted and inspiring poem that encourages readers to embrace their unique strengths and persevere through life's challenges. With just a few minor tweaks, it could become an even more polished piece of writing.
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