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IF WE EVER MEET AGAIN
My joy knew no boundary
when I told all and sundry
that your love was intact
and that's why I will react
it's no longer a child's play
when love has come to stay
Ever since I have been with you
you loved wearing white and blue
your taste for colour combination
never ever leaves your imagination
you're a woman of dignity and integrity
I delight in the pleasure of your affinities
Your sweet pattern of life is appealing
it has triggered a release of adrenaline
I'm so amped and full of energy around
you're now my classic rose I have found
I would like to lay in your arms of love
in you I found grace to take me above
my heart sings a melody of love song
I must continue loving you for so long
©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu
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Lavender
Mon, 2022-08-15 12:56
If We Ever Meet Again
Hello, Jackweb,
The wonderful thing about your poem is the obvious time and thought you have invested into it. The words seem to be carefully chosen, and I can feel the excitement and devotion. You give a nice descriptive image of your subject and also very specific details to your emotions. I also like your smooth rhyme pattern. Such a loving, cheery poem - and then your title, which makes me assume this person is no longer in your life. I hope you do meet again!
Thank you!
L
Jackweb
Mon, 2022-08-15 13:24
Much appreciated!
I'm glad you stopped by and read through. To be honest with you, all these romantic poetry is just imaginary. It never happened around me. I created them as if it really happened. Just the power of creativity of art.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Lavender
Mon, 2022-08-15 13:37
Indeed!
The power of creativity of art!
L
Chiori
Mon, 2022-08-15 18:43
A good construction of words
A good construction of words nice work
always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing
Jackweb
Thu, 2022-08-18 10:50
O yes!
Much appreciated Chiori!
"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Jackweb
Thu, 2022-08-18 10:50
O yes!
Much appreciated Chiori!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Ray Whitaker
Thu, 2022-08-18 22:45
Your writing is full of the way and means about Love
Nice job on this one, my friend.
INHO, your title makes me wonder about the departure. I was looking for some mentions of that in the body of the poem, and the piece goes in a "the present" direction, I didn't see much about her having departed. the piece is very readable, and [again, IMHO] consistent throughout.
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Jackweb
Fri, 2022-08-19 03:35
Hello Ray
Yes, is intentional. I would be glad to a full book on love. Thank you for stopping by.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Jackweb
Fri, 2022-08-19 03:36
Hello Ray
Yes, is intentional. I would be glad to a full book on love. Thank you for stopping by.
What is INHO?
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Ray Whitaker
Fri, 2022-08-19 10:52
INHO is a typo
On my part…. Should be IMHO, meaning “in my humble opinion”
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