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THE IDEAL WOMAN

Submitted by Jackweb on Mon, 2022-10-10 14:12

How beautiful is your heart so clean
I'll forever rest in the arms of your love
gazing into your eyes electrifies me
I'm now fully charged with longing

you're the ideal woman I have long for
your awesomeness is incomparable
my dream has finally come to fruition
I'm now boasting like a lion's manes

I've sincerely taken a dominion of love
nothing else could stop this friendship
we're formidable - no one can break us
for the unity of love binds us in great joy

lets love lead us a million mile away
I'm assuring you; we'll never breakdown
the strength of our love is unceasing
we'll get to our desired destination

©® ONYINYECHI COSMOS ETU

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