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I wanted you to say I want you too

I want you to say
I wanted you too

Your words are astounding
fully of glory
women create
not only for themselves
but for others also
a sad story
they just try
to make life gory

just because someone may have
destroyed their youth
now towards others
they'd love to remain uncouth

Sad is the moment
when some one
who you love betrays
either knowingly or accidentally

I want you to say
I forgive you
instead of
may you equally suffer too

Man has a wide/broader heart
all say
women love her man
to such glory display

Some day
one day
you also may

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OLDER VERSION unread except by one
Yesterday today and tomorrow May DayKeep waiting
the tide will turn
from high to low
and
then your eyes will again
once again glow
as over is the oceans show

don't get scared
all passes in such a way
yesterday passed
came a today
again today will pass
and
give way
as tomorrow will never aver come
as a tomorrow
but only as another day
we say today
have your way
this day too will pass away !

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Free verse
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Comments

A philosophical piece that holds a lot of truth dear lovedly .
I like it and found nothing to suggest for improving.
Thank you for sharing.

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The older version, ending with "this day too will pass away !" does not have the interesting flowm of ideas and narrative as in the newer. It has a you, an I, and "man" (the universal), so offers more depth...in what you needed to hear, but did not.

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

shall review later

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