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I told you

Submitted by lovedly on Fri, 2022-11-04 09:54

Another great friend
I'd admired
years since we met
just a year or two senior
age wise
knowledge
beyond the far reaching crowds
passed away this morning ...
left all bereft
mourning

none will remember
after the lantern
is switched off

next one please
calls the padri
who is now in queue
has anyone any clue

none what soever
the petrichor is over
the scented candles flavor now waver
memory swings
like a new one in a cradle
why have you brought me
just to pass away
sadly
who...will answer me ?

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
His last rites soonly
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Lavender

Fri, 2022-11-04 12:55

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I am so sorry. Your poem is still and reflective.
L

lovedly

Sat, 2022-11-05 00:35

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'TIS AN INEVITABILITY
by now all know it

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Geezer

Sat, 2022-11-05 11:44

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for the loss of your friend. Yes, it is inevitable, but I'm a grasshopper, fiddling the days away, not worried about tomorrow. I would rather be surprised when the day comes. ~ Geez.
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lovedly

Sat, 2022-11-05 12:28

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ha ha ha Gee
u wouldn't then be

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Rosewood Apothecary

Sat, 2022-11-05 20:10

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Is an admirable trait and is an important step in the grieving process. Yes, it’s inevitable but it is a bit sad and we do miss people terribly when they depart. There’s even a bit of light humor here which helps us make sense of it all.

Great job as usual,
Tim

lovedly

Sun, 2022-11-06 01:49

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another friend passes away
now daily at my age
no births
no kids
no marriages news

all have been blown off by gales and passing winds
only trails remain behind
you know me

one day smoke trail you will see
perhaps twill be me ...

LIFE MUST HAVE HUMOUR
all is a mirage

EAST OR WEST
just your mind enlarge
many just silently barge

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