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I RECALL, I recall.........

Too many years now in the past,
awakening to a feast's fragrance
and the sound of kin folk gathering
as final leaves desert the trees.

The battle fought 'most every year
to keep "pluckers" from an early sampling
of turkey or some favorite dish
with resultant hand slaps and laughter.

At last a gathering around
the adult as well as children's table
while Grandpa offered up our thanks
in that still remembered deep bass voice.

Then eating while we talked
of subjects varying wide
politics, a friend's new child
I'd sit and listen to the side.
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Now I'm at the table's head
All the older ones passed by
leaving me here in their stead
Before giving thanks I sigh

Where went all those bygone days
that left behind such memories?
They're hidden now within time's haze
soon to leave with the years' breeze.

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this was written about Christmas or Thanksgiving time. I was waiting for it, and sure enough, the rhymer showed up! Heh, heh! It's so hard to turn it off! Good story and I'm sure that wherever he is, grandpa and all the elders that went before you are proud that you remember the family values and memories. I kind of like the way that the rhyming showed up so subtly and then became full blown at the end. Kind of emphasizing the return of the memories that mean so much. ~ Gee

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This was posted during the holidays and it took this long (and a minor edit) before somebody noticed it. The gradual change in form is something I've been toying with for a while. I call it morphing poetry and I agree that in some poems and subjects it seems to work well. I appreciate your dragging this out of the undiscovered files.........stan

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I missed the rhymes in the first 3 stanzas but what the heck, it's still a well-written poem.

Alid

This was written in the "morphing" style so that's why you missed the rhymes lol. Appreciate your dropping by..........stan

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So sad, mentor of mine. How could you "forget" my name after all this time?! LOL.

Alid

Damn pain killers give me numb fingers. Have No excuse for not proofreading though lol. I'm gonna leave it as is to remind me to read before hitting "save"

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