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I Made a Deal with the Devil

I made a deal with the devil
And sealed it with a demon’s kiss.

My soul for his love
It was conditional.

At first, it didn’t feel real.
It was unlike any love I’d ever known.
Full of life and promise and purpose.
And that’s how he gets you.

Slowly and slowly
He drug out my soul.

Piece by piece
He chipped at my heart.

And before I knew it,
I wasn’t even me anymore.

I begged for me back
And he laughed in my face.
He told me it was my fault.
Made me say sorry for not loving him back.

I tried to take back what was mine
But the deal had already been made.

He took me into his jaws of death
And swallowed me whole,
Spit me back out
And left me.
Empty,
Broken,
Soulless.

He didn’t hold up his end of the deal…
Afterall,
He was a devil in disguise.

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I created this poem to be a comparison between making a deal with the devil and a relationship with a narcissist. Feel free to read it more than once to look at it both ways. Let me know what you think!
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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem titled "I Made a Deal with the Devil" explores the theme of selling one's soul for love. The speaker tells the story of how they made a deal with the devil and sealed it with a demon's kiss. The poem effectively captures the gradual loss of the speaker's soul as they fall deeper into the devil's grip. The use of vivid imagery, such as "jaws of death" and "swallowed me whole," adds to the eerie atmosphere of the poem.

One suggestion for a line edit would be to change "He drug out my soul" to "He dragged out my soul." This correction would improve the grammatical accuracy of the line.

Overall, the poem effectively conveys the theme of the consequences of making deals with the devil. The language is strong and the imagery is haunting. The ending is effective in revealing the true nature of the devil and the emptiness that results from the speaker's actions.

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Thanks for the feedback, AI! I appreciate the grammar correction!

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Thank you so very much for your kind words! I'm looking forward to hearing from you!

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