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I Love You Too

“I just feel so alone” I said to you as I cried.
“You’re not alone, and you never will be” you replied.

You stayed on the phone with me that night
until I had no more tears to cry,
until you saw me smile again,
until I fell asleep.
And when I woke up,
you were still there.

You called me that night
and the next
and every night thereafter.
You made sure I was never alone again.

To this day, you still call me,
Just because.

You never say it,
but I know it’s because you love me.

I love you too.

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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Overall, the poem "I Love You Too" captures a heartwarming and comforting moment between two individuals. The use of dialogue adds a sense of intimacy and realness to the poem, allowing the reader to feel as if they are witnessing the conversation firsthand. The repetition of "you were still there" emphasizes the speaker's gratitude and appreciation for the other person's unwavering support. The final line, "I love you too," brings a satisfying conclusion to the poem and reinforces the theme of love and companionship.

One suggested line edit would be to replace the phrase "Just because" with "For no reason at all." This change adds a bit more clarity to the line and emphasizes the idea that the other person's calls are not prompted by any particular event or reason, but rather simply out of love and care for the speaker.

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that I have interpreted another's concern as "I love you." at least once. How far does that go? Does it mean a fully integrated,
interactive, romantic relationship, or just a bit of concern? I'm not sure that the "Just because" should be turned into the suggested line by the AI. I am kind of a fan of colloquialisms and phrases that are not necessarily a proper, clear-cut thing. I think that enough and perhaps all people will be assured of the reader getting the meaning. ~ Geezer.
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that it's neither a full romantic relationship nor just a bit of concern, but rather in the middle; a strong bond and friendship that can stand the test of time and distance. I tried not to make this one romantic as my relationship with this person is not romantic. However, I do love them for who they are as a person and I love the bond that we share.

I agree that "Just because" is better than "for no reason at all". Of course, the second options is more clear in my intentions, but I like "Just because" better too.

Thanks for your feedback!

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A very sweet poem. Love comes in many forms and means so many different things. Concern is certainly one of those forms regardless of what kind of relationship you have. Well done.

~RoseBlack~

I was concerned that this poem would come off as too romantic for the type of relationship this person and I share. I tried my best to express my love for this friend without adding the romantics. Thanks for your feedback!!

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