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I don't know what quatern or not

Submitted by lovedly on Fri, 2015-03-13 14:35

I don't know what quatern or not

but this piece of exquisite poetic art
tells me somewhere in the hollow of my heart
lies a desire
a want and hope
like the lantern with darkness to elope
as the wanton flows
from within all night
the desires glow
when the lantern will be out
none shall know
my life so does ebb but slow
I want her to know

come alongside once again
to glow
am I wrong to think so?

Dear sublime
only you know

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Barbara Writes

Fri, 2015-03-13 18:53

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I like this

This was eloquently written
Rhymes well in my poetic ear
Not knowing what a Quatern is
Neither I before Stan's contest.

A desire, a want and hope
This was eloquently written
Like lantern with darkness, elope
From within, your desire glow.

I'd love to come alongside you
To glow in this poetic art
This was eloquently written
No, it is not wrong to think so.

I'm not sublime, but I do know
The desire of this hollow heart
For exquisite poetic art
This was eloquently written.

Quatern just for you lovedly.

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lovedly

Fri, 2015-03-13 19:50

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Barbara
a quatern for me
hope Stan reads it from you
so does raj too
Judie of course shall
Ian may have a good week end
and
a quatern for me
Sunday

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Barbara Writes

Fri, 2015-03-13 20:08

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Glad you like

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lovedly

Fri, 2015-03-13 22:39

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I like this

This was eloquently written
Rhymes well in my poetic ear
Not knowing what a Quatern is
Neither I before Stan's contest.

A desire, a want and hope
This was eloquently written
Like lantern with darkness, elope
From within, your desire glow.

I'd love to come alongside you
To glow in this poetic art
This was eloquently written
No, it is not wrong to think so.

I'm not sublime, but I do know
The desire of this hollow heart
For exquisite poetic art
This was eloquently written.

Quatern just for you lovedly.

Have a Cheerful Day

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Barbara Writes

Fri, 2015-03-13 23:01

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Enjoy

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lovedly

Sat, 2015-03-14 00:52

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rules thanks Barbara

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