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How's The Red wine

Submitted by lovedly on Mon, 2020-05-04 10:42

If money only grew on trees
we would never our expenditure freeze
we have to budget our monthly
even if, money today is plenty

but what we have in hand today
will be more than that
we have after the recession to pay
come what may

as apples cost a dollar each
tomorrow the same will be
out of our reach

Only fragrance we would then enjoy
I beseech save your money
lessen your expenses
Oh rich or like me poor boy

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Geezer

Mon, 2020-05-04 10:56

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There is much rhyme here. I think that this may be one of your best in recent times. I didn't struggle with the lines or where this poem is going. The thoughts were clear and concise and I wish that whatever has brought you to this point, would stick around a while. Nice work. ~ Geezer.
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lovedly

Mon, 2020-05-04 12:03

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Thanks for what you say
I can only thank thee
friendly Gee

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c lynn brooks

Mon, 2020-05-04 12:09

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I just love third stanza this brought the whole concept home I thought
nice write a lot of raw truth here

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lovedly

Mon, 2020-05-04 13:30

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....as apples cost a dollar each
tomorrow the same will be
out of our reach....'''

THANKS have as many
all orchards are now open
guys are scared you know it
red CORONA
is still lurking

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