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HOPE ALIVE

Time has been tethered
in the cave of despair
life rides in the vehicle
of uncertainty and penury
but this time a sunrise
shall smile aloud sincerely

©© Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

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well structured. Short and to the point with effective visuals.
I can't see why you need to capitalize the word sincerely, but it's your poem and you know better

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For stopping by. You're right! No intention of using upper case. Am changing it now.
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"Time will crush on us if we don't utilize it. Just remember, you're an element of time".

~Jackweb

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Hello, Jackweb,
Much said in six lines. "...a sunrise shall smile aloud sincerely." That definitely brings hope alive.
Thank you!
L

A big thanks to you for reading and commenting.
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"Time will crush on us if we don't utilize it. Just remember, you're an element of time".

~Jackweb

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But amazing. Keep them coming. I love the brevity.

Tim

A big thanks to you for reading and commenting. Sure, I'll keep them coming... !
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"Time will crush on us if we don't utilize it. Just remember, you're an element of time".

~Jackweb

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This time a sunrise
Shall smile aloud sincerely.
This is a short but spicy piece, keep up the good work

Thanks so much for stopping by.
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"Time will crush on us if we don't utilize it. Just remember, you're an element of time".

~Jackweb

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