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Honoring The Dead (Ottava Rima Wes 3 Classic Poems WS)

Submitted by alidzain on Thu, 2016-01-28 12:40

Tonight, we hail the dead who fought with pride,
the bravest men who bled to save us all
We lay them now and pray that God will guide
their souls to stand in Lom, the Heroes' Hall,
and known as men who changed the battles' tide.
O Knights of Truth, come lift your heads, stand tall.
For you who gave us hope for days ahead,
your glorious end, a tale, we'll tell and spread!

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Structured: Western
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Editing - rough draft
Workshop: 
Three classic poetic forms.

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Rula

Thu, 2016-01-28 23:58

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this is absolutely beautiful and fits well the Ottava Rima.
Bravo!!

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alidzain

Fri, 2016-01-29 13:16

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I always find it tough trying to do iambic pentameter as I'm much more of a free verse poem writer, even rhyming can be a real headache when trying to stick to the message. I'm glad this one pull through.

Shukran Rula.

Alid

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