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Hidden Room - Hidden -Challenge #18

I feel safe in my hidden room

Alone with my hidden gloom

No one can see what is in me

No one can ever set me free

Eaten by my self contained rage

Feeling like a prisoner in a cage

I daze through my dark nights

Have never seen any shining lights

I sit lonely in my waiting room

Waiting to enter my final tomb

I wait for my death to unfurl

It is not as cold as this world

You will never hear me say I'm back

I know the deficiencies that I lack

Some sins just can never be laved

Not even by lying down in a grave

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Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
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Not Explicit Content

Comments

of a hidden room, feels real and like solitary confinement in a dungeon or something. My only criticsm is that; you are supposed to use the entire title of the challenge; so it would be: Hidden Room. You can always add your own title after.
It would appear this way: Hidden Room - Hidden -Challenge #18. I know, silly rule, but necessary for the quagmire of our programming. We are trying to fix it. Thank you ~ Geezer.
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