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Hidden Room - Hidden -Challenge #18
I feel safe in my hidden room
Alone with my hidden gloom
No one can see what is in me
No one can ever set me free
Eaten by my self contained rage
Feeling like a prisoner in a cage
I daze through my dark nights
Have never seen any shining lights
I sit lonely in my waiting room
Waiting to enter my final tomb
I wait for my death to unfurl
It is not as cold as this world
You will never hear me say I'm back
I know the deficiencies that I lack
Some sins just can never be laved
Not even by lying down in a grave
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Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
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Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Tue, 2022-08-02 09:28
Your presentation...
of a hidden room, feels real and like solitary confinement in a dungeon or something. My only criticsm is that; you are supposed to use the entire title of the challenge; so it would be: Hidden Room. You can always add your own title after.
It would appear this way: Hidden Room - Hidden -Challenge #18. I know, silly rule, but necessary for the quagmire of our programming. We are trying to fix it. Thank you ~ Geezer.
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Geezer
Wed, 2022-08-03 10:16
You will...
recieve a link at the end of the month when we conclude the episode. That link will enable you to print a certificate suitable for hanging on the wall and showing to your friends and family! ~ Regards, Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.