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Here For You

Don't look away in shame,
let the river of tears flow.
It's hard to cleanse your name
when people's belief
is a no-show.

Breaking down and falling,
you reached for aid
but hearts no longer trusting.
"Better off dead,"they said.

One stupid mistake you've made,
punished for a lifetime.
Imprisoned by the grip of hate,
no one seems to care,
you've done your time.

Your spirit is screaming,
anger, burning,
your soul, weeping
for your dead dignity.

You want to crush those mouths
that spill only mockery,
its not worth it, my friend.
Don't break your promise
to your family.

They want to see you rise
and be the man you're meant to be.
If you choose to strike,
then you'll prove to the haters
that they are right.

You can't see the light?
Let me be your eyes,
I will be your guide,
I'll help you fly.

When your heart sinks,
I'll lift it up for you.
When you lose your voice,
I'll speak for you.
When old friends leave your side,
you know it's true,
I'll be here for you.

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Free verse
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Last few words: 
This is for a friend who got into trouble with the law and was struggling to do the right thing.
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Comments

this is another good piece. I hope your words would help your friend.

Line 3 S.1 [it's] instead of its?
Line 5. Last stanza [leave] instead of left?

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I was just lucky that my sisters and some of my friends helped me to get away from the same friends who got him into trouble. I know he isactually a good man deep inside and it is a waste to let him degrade because he's not given a second chance so I reached out to him. Thanks for the help. Still poor with the tenses.

Alid

author comment

Goodness me - when mistakes are made it's so hard to get back on our feet. ( especially if it's serious ). To whom this may concern would, I'm sure be encouraged by a loyal and sympathetic friend. :)

I agree with Rula with regard the two corrections she's pointed out.

Great write - thanks for sharing.

Love Mand xxxx

Thanks for the visit, the read and the comment.

Alid

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