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HEAVY AIR

Still, hardly a single breath of air
Till distant thunder grumbles
Omen of what the clouds will bear
Racing as they build and tumble.
Moisture falling everywhere.

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Structured: Western
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A clever acrostic indeed.
Take care.

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Plain acrostics aren't my favorite type poetry so when I Do write one I add a bit of challenge by making it rhyme. Thanks for the read and comment......stan

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Yes very clever and I can just smell and feel the air. Jx

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Thank you. I appreciate your time to read and comment.......stan

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of a dry spell coming to a sudden end in a hearty cloudburst is one that can be appreciated by many living in varying and different areas of the world but not Scotland where rain is never far away.

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I suspect you get tired of scraping moss out of your ears lol. Appreciate your visit.........stan

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And short and sweet - another just like me :-)

Can I suggest you change the last line to read simply 'moisture falls' ??

Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

so now I'll call you sweety lol. Can't follow your suggestion though. It would mess up rhyme.......stan

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I second all the above comments. ( that's what you call a lazy comment ) Lol

You hit the spot for me on this one - I love thunder storms and the electrifying atmosphere!

Love Mand xxx

I've ridden out one tornado in my life and we had a hail storm so heavy the other afternoon that it looked like it had snowed the following morning. I also love storms.........stan

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