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Heaven in your eyes!

Submitted by Leslie on Wed, 2023-03-15 07:11

Try to understand
the sadness in my heart
I'd hoped that you might help me
through the darkness on my part
and though you think that I belong
I'm not like all the rest
the challenges I've faced in life
have put me to the test
so if you see me on the street
take a second look around
turn to me and cry out
make a joyful sound
mental illness is my reality
it won't just go away
so take the time to educate
pick up a book or two
you just might see the manna
fall from heaven into view
as the burden lifts for me to see
acceptance in your eyes too!

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
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Last few words: 
I know this may sound redundant, but I feel strongly that everyone that I can reach. Will understand the reality of mental illness. Please read this and enjoy.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Leslie

Wed, 2023-03-15 09:27

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I am sorry that your son suffers with such anxiety. I know that there isn't much that I can say that will help.
Always keep faith in what you have become and in whatever your higher self may be. I had an experience
this morning at the hospital in which I live and like your son I also have bouts with
extreme anxiety. The agency nurse was late and I was afraid that I would not be able to get my meds on time.
I asked the charge nurse what to do and she said that I must wait. So patiently I waited and just in time the nurse came and I got to be the first in line. Many times it has worked this way for me and I hope that it will for you.

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

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Leslie

Wed, 2023-03-15 12:57

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I just wanted to say thank again for whoever takes time to read this!

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

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Rosewood Apothecary

Wed, 2023-03-15 19:19

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It’s really difficult and stigmatized. I know proper diagnosis and medication are not always attainable and many people just have little understanding or compassion.

The structure of this one is pretty good and yet not so rigid. We are reading your poems and we are glad you’re sharing. I’m speaking for everyone.

Keep it up,
Tim

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