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Happy to me

Happy to me is a kind of pleasant
Amber glow that comes from within
Peering out beneath those chestnut eyes
Primrose cheeks & a dainty smile
You bring joy outside where ever you go

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The poem "Happy to me" presents a vivid image of happiness, using a combination of abstract and concrete language. The second line, "Amber glow that comes from within," is particularly effective in its use of color imagery to convey an abstract concept.

The poem could benefit from more consistent use of poetic devices. For example, the first line uses a simile ("Happy to me is a kind of pleasant"), but this device is not used elsewhere in the poem. Consistent use of such devices can help to create a more cohesive and engaging piece.

The rhythm of the poem could also be improved. The first three lines each have eight syllables, creating a rhythmic pattern, but this pattern is not maintained in the final two lines. Adjusting the syllable count in these lines could enhance the poem's musicality.

The poem's theme of happiness is clear, but it could be deepened with the inclusion of more specific details or personal experiences. This would help to make the poem more relatable and emotionally resonant for readers.

The poem's structure is straightforward, with one stanza and no clear rhyme scheme. Experimenting with different structures and rhyme schemes could add another layer of interest to the poem.

Finally, the poem's title, "Happy to me," is a direct reflection of its content. While this is not inherently problematic, a more nuanced or unexpected title could add an additional layer of meaning or intrigue.

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Hello, Tawny,
So much to like within this, but I especially like the "amber glow that comes from within." That just says it all!
Thank you!

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