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Happy Birthday, America
A large spread of
Grilled hamburgers,
Crisp
Watermelon,
Creamy potato
Salad, and
Cold sodas.
Candles lit into
The ether,
Sparkling and banging
To remind us to celebrate.
Some professional.
Some amateur.
All spectacular.
Take a moment
To be thankful
For our freedoms
And to remember
Those lives cut
Short to protect it.
It is somber
And rowdy
Like America.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
Tue, 2022-07-26 05:18
It’s every July 4th party
I have ever attended. I can smell this poem when I’m reading it. Standing in my aunt’s yard 7 years old lighting off fireworks no child should have been allowed to have…Roman candle sparks in my sister’s eye… welcome to the site.
What sweet nostalgia,
I love it,
Tim
Jackweb
Tue, 2022-07-26 15:04
The imagery!
I liked the use of visual imagery in the poem. It stimulates ones appetite.
It reads:
A large spread of
Grilled hamburgers,
Crisp
Watermelon,
Creamy potato
Salad, and
Cold sodas.
.
"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb