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GOLDEN BALLERINA
I am posting this Haiku today and will expand into three other forms tomorrow
A lone poplar leaf
swirling in an autumn wind
a golden ballet
Tomorrow will post i Western Classic, Free Verse, and Parallel forms.............scribbler
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scribbler
Mon, 2010-12-13 23:03
oops!
I appreciate the early correction. You'd think with 10 fingers I could at least count to 5 lol....................................scribbler
author commentscribbler
Tue, 2010-12-14 07:16
golden
Was your feet leaving due to poem or too much wine lol. thanks..................stan
author commentmand
Tue, 2010-12-14 05:43
Hiya Stan
Just lovely!!
Clever poet
Love Mand xxxxxx
scribbler
Tue, 2010-12-14 07:19
ballerina
hey mand. Sometimes a sight inspires and I don't know what form to use so I use multiple............stan
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