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Gifts For Jayne

My prayers that I send to you
are the wings of love and hope.
May they help you find your way home
when you feel so cold, lost and alone

May the faith I have in your courage,
be a gift of unyielding strength.
The shield that will not break into two
when pain and despair threatens you.

Last but not least, I am giving you
the promise of a lasting friendship.
May it be the will to summon a miracle
when you face what seem to be
the inevitable.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
Jayne, please read my poem ''A Message To A Friend'' too. I think it's a far better poem for you compared to this, hun. Take care.
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Comments

Khalid. The 2nd stanza best describes Jayne. Though I don't know her closely, her verses always ring true!!!

She'd better defeat that damn pain.
Take care you two.

❤❤❤❤❤❤

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........Robert Frost☺

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Glad you liked it. I am following Stan's suggestion as best as I could, that is to give her messages in poems to uplift her spirit. I wanted to write a sonnet but I found myself facing the writer's block and have to settle for this.

Alid

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