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Genesis (Inception)

Submitted by Rosewood Apothecary on Sun, 2022-10-23 12:56

The most worthy chase one can partake of
Can only be the diligent pursuit of happiness
With its genesis from a place of self awareness
Never originating in external validation
Which must be a byproduct of the effects
Your own happiness has had on others’ lives

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Lavender

Sun, 2022-10-23 20:03

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Hi, Tim,
Such wisdom, and truth. I really like the way this piece extends outward and inward - not only in your language, but the feeling it brings. It's such a basic premise that so many struggle with and cannot fully understand.
Thank you,
L

Candlewitch

Mon, 2022-10-24 09:15

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I think Lavender's take on it is right on the nose! I really like the written thoughts expressed to make the reader question and reflect on their own motivations. excellent write.

both, eddy styx and Cat

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