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Forever a Knight

The taxi seem to float
gently above licorice streets,
shimmering with last morns
rain still wet on the lips

The signs seemed forboding
declaring a destination,
almost attained and almost
enough to turn heads awry
leading into a long goodnight

Anticipation rode
anxiety to gnaw an aside,
though outside all was still
a Michelangelic statue
in a blink and a stare

In a thousand seconds
fear turned a coward
into a brave night,
the unknown awaited
but so would regret

Glass pools shined a reception
fit for the common man,
no 'common man' waited
a man of great substance
whose gentle air preceded him
awaited, just me, terrified

Calmness receded as Giants
rode steel eagles over safe harbour
screeching at an eastern wind,
thousands of souls gather farewells
though they send loving invisable
goodbye gifts, in a hug and kiss

My chariot halted with a jolt
I swallowed fear expelling it
with just one breath of hope,
charging into the fray and
into the arms of compassion

Air seemed to split atoms
all breathing halted with time,
dancing steps and bodies
shielded an approaching form
Then the suns rays gathered
to dance a lilt on a face

he seemed to beam forward
kissing round shocked lips
I knew then it would be OK.
whatever this meeting wrought
its end would be preceded
by lifetimes of friendship

as times pools are stained red
as my lifeblood thins,
I am glad I defeated fate
her last hand of separation
failed to divide our worlds
a stranger in person hid
an eternal knight of my heart

who rescued me with friendship
it was more than I deserved.

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stanza 4, line 3
''into a brave night,''
I think you misspelled '' knight'' .

Ah, a poem about a triumph and a knight.Lovely.

A knight.

I wonder who he is,
the man who saved my friend
and shower her with such bliss.

Will you send to him
my uttermost gratitude, my dear?
If God is willing,
mayhaps romance will be the dancer
to celebrate your life
and a wonderful beginning
the reward for a friendship
that you've been offering.

Who's to say what tomorrow brings?
All that we can is hope and strive
to paint in colours of butterfly's wings
and rejoice that we are still alive

I'll never stop praying for you
and hope the best for all my friends.
I'm still writing because of you
I am blessed to have you, my friend.

Hugs and kisses for you
sealed with a prayer or two.
you know I love you
like the vast sky, so blue

Alid

I meant 'night' not knight ... for as a lady I cant see myself as such its such a manly pursuit in my eyes

I am so glad your well enough to participate in all the festivities and I am sure everyone has enjoyed your work I see a bright long future ahead for you my friend ... 8yrs ago I started a 'hobby' that now sometimes overtakes my other passion music ... but at least with my music I can lay back and put the headphones on and drift away as I always do

Thank you for taking the time to read I appreciate it greatly

much love Jayne xxx

Oh and P.S. it isn't that sort of Love it is and will always be a friend and so much like family that he is family to me....we get on so well and for years we tried meeting but fate always seemed to be against us but eventually I got to meet him in person and I actually met him first here

I have breen privelaged to have met some of the most wonderful people over the years on the net but this Gentlemen has always been my stalwart supporter and now well I hope when next we meet be it in this lifetime or the next we get to spend more time together as we are so much alike in ways and we got on like a house on fire.

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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it felt as if I was representing the younger malay poets in my country. I'm pissed off when a 'veteran' in the malay poetry writing gave the statement that the work of new poets here have no value. I thought he should be encouraging and gave a valid criticism which includes revealing the strength as well as weakness in a their poems and gave good examples for improvements to show support. Ironically, he was one of the reasons why I accepted the invitation to be directly involved in the events. We met and I gave him a piece of my mind. I told him that his action goes against the very reason why the malay language council was formed. I got fired up a little and I thought I'll get into trouble but I was surprised when some other veterans backed me up.

Regarding about 'night'. Well to me a knight is a knight no matter the gender but that's my personal opinion and this is your poem and it is your choice. I guessed I was trying to relate the word with the title too much. That said, your previous poem came with a message that all is not well. I'm worried for you. Serioulsly, how are you now? If only I have the means to help you with the bills, I will (sigh) .
I wonder if the person you are referring to in this piece is our 'Ian'.lol.

P.S. I think I have yet to find my voice in my write, its just that I'm a constant writer in the local malay paper's literature section that they invite me with others to support our writing. Sadly, the numbers of malay writers and the interest in the art have been declining. We are struggling. Still I do hope to be a true poet worthy of my race one fine day.

Alid

Ian here, Jayne has many friends, I am just her new dad like person, and proud to be so.
I would have liked to meet with our Jayne, but I am one of the ones that have to wait till time is no more and we can wander the universe as we wish.
You are aware that I shall be meeting Many of my friends and family just in that now out there where my cave is just left of reality, where it catches hold of the Spirit world.
Thanks for your support and prayers for Jayne,
Yours as always, Ian

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Unconditional love to you all.
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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

I felt that it's the right thing to do or should I say the least I could do for a friend. I really wish that she'll be fine. I still feel the pain on my chest now and then but I've begun to accept that I just have to be stronger to embrace. The doc did say that will be ''normal''. I went to one of the events on a wheelchair with my friend whom I used to admire. (sigh) The truth is I still do but she's chosen another so now we remain as friends. She and her man are good people. They are always there for me. With the haze from Indonesia causing problems in my country, I need a wheelchair ready just in case my chest hurts too much due to difficulty in breathing which can happen suddenly. I am better than the last time when I can't leave the house for many days but I am not completely okay.Writing helps me to deal with it. Sometimes my sis don't let me visit mum when the haze is too strong.
You see, that's why I feel strongly for our Jayne. We are both struggling and I don't see mine stopping anytime soon. Mum used to tell me that life itself is a struggle. That's very true. Jayne's strong will made me want to be just as strong as hers. She's one of my idols, the people I looked up to in my life. I've lost a few of them over the years but I still remember what they stands for, their courage, their love, their friendship and I try to be like that to the people I love to give them the best of me to continue their legacy.

Alid

I don't know what the future will bring but I'm ready to fight hard for it. That's what your will teach me. Be a fighter. Never give up. Thank you, teacher.

Alid

I read this earlier but time stole my reply.
Our Aussie Boadicea in full fighting form.
A language that will make the Gods shrink into oblivion.
A feeling of battles taking place and the spirit holding firm.
Now Lady of verse that tends to her friends with love.
The children have sent some tears to me, and a shaking of the spirit, we have many battles to win our Boadicea, they are of many types.
Some are beaten with a mighty thought, others with a strength drawn from the universe.
I shall wait till the warmth of healing cools and the walks on Golden sands can once again be ours..
Yours sending healing energy to you,
Da xxxx

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Time is a dirty thief lol and this was always about self confidence I may seem to have it here where I am more than comfortable

But ive always had a fear of not living up to expectations but now its not such a bother its not that I dont care its that finally after 46yrs i have found a pieces of myself I can live with and its enough to make me take off the veil of shame ive worn for so long without fear ... I face what most people can't even contemplate without breaking out in a sweat of fear everyday

My Father always used to say I was a child that had no fear, as a child I've fallen off shed roofs climbed the big tree all the other kids were terrified to climb lol I used to say I am not brave I'm stupid.

Broke lots of bones over the years lol paying for it now though (wink)

Love to you both always Jayne x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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You know the Children tell me or make me aware of many things.
We have been together for quite a few years now, and our unconditional love lets us wander through many lovely words and thoughts, your poetry has excelled and you have grown to trust yourself, this is the main thing we have learned of you and with you.
Our journey together here and in many spheres has been a beautiful one and will continue to be so..
We talk not of the weak physical beings we are sometimes but the beauty of the mind that we share.
One day we will meet and well I will leave that till our now's are the same.
All my bestest thoughts to you, and healing energy is my gift for you today and always.
Yours Da, Anne, and the Children xxx

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
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that can separate true friends. I have very few "true friends" and I treasure them greatly! I have tried hard to be a 'true friend" to those people that have trusted me with their "lives". This work tells me that you know what it tis like to have "true friends". So glad that you are back to writing and I hope that you are feeling better. H.Bs Ly ~ Gee

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

There are names that I see in the dim light of my candle that instantly make me smile yours is one of them.

You have always been one of my best friends here always a great support and then I met your lovely wife who is just beautiful I can see why you love her so much your perfect for each other, as it should be for all of us but were not all so lucky as you

I wont be round FB for a time so if either of you need to contact me leave a message here and I'll answer it as soon as is possible

The next months going to be rough so I'll be flitting in and out when I can ... don't be surprised if i dont reply for a few days I sleep pretty much 24/7 when I do sleep its deep and I hope healing

the prayers as most welcome from any faith right now one cant be picky which god helps lol

my love to you both always my brother J xox

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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