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FOLIAGE IS

Submitted by lovedly on Sat, 2022-06-04 20:33

Beautiful
in HOPES FOR EVER WE REMAIN
Birds come and sing
then fly away
that's life's ways always

none has come for ever to stay
life is like forest foliage

autumn may come as it may
great foliage smoulders away
you too may

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Free verse
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Music has always been the biggest cure for maladies of love be sure i did love playing in a band now i am deaf can't self cure but read lips and mind musifies it thanks all
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Editing - rough draft
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Not Explicit Content

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Candlewitch

Sun, 2022-06-05 06:43

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I really like what you wrote in the last notes: " read lips and mind (musifies) it thanks all" musifies" what a great term!

yes, we fly high for awhile, especially when we are young...then we move on to the conclusion of our lives.

*hugs, Cat

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lovedly

Sun, 2022-06-05 12:19

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LIKE SHAKES...I too create new words

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Geezer

Sun, 2022-06-05 16:38

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Musifying it does it for me too! Good work.~ Geez.
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lovedly

Sun, 2022-06-05 21:54

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For your yeps
ooo lalala lalala

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