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The first time published-The Fearless Rose

O, the fearless rose
Shall thou not feel inferior
When life comes to you in a sake of crisis
Stand tall and high to seek courage
With its protection
Of sharp pitch thorn
And a radiant smile

O, the fearless rose
The true beauty of all
Exude her exquisite look
Despite that life is not perfect and flawless
There is always a battle of the storm to fight
Shall thou not feel deny
This is what life has to go through

O, the fearless Rose
Fighting for her own life through
droplet rain and bitter cold
refuse to give up and surrender
persist to carry on her strength
To conquer her fear of all
Until her red delicate petal bloom
The renewal of the spring season comes again
Making her stand out from all
This is what showcases her as a unique one
that no other can compare to her
with a sense of inspiration and resilience
and for that
I emulate her

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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "The Fearless Rose" is a motivational piece that draws inspiration from the resilience of a rose. The poet makes use of various literary devices to convey the message of courage and perseverance in the face of adversity. The theme of the poem revolves around the idea that life is not perfect, and there are always challenges to overcome, but one should not give up on their dreams.

The poem starts with an invocation to the fearless rose, which is presented as an epitome of courage and strength. The poet asks the rose not to feel inferior when life comes in the form of a crisis, and to stand tall and seek courage. The use of the word 'inferior' is a bit odd in this context, as it is not clear who or what the rose is supposed to feel inferior to. Perhaps a better word choice would be 'defeated' or 'helpless'.

The poem then goes on to describe the rose's protection in the form of sharp pitch thorn and a radiant smile. This imagery is quite effective in conveying the idea that one can be both tough and beautiful at the same time. The poet then extols the beauty of the rose and emphasizes that despite life's imperfections, one should not feel deny it.

The second stanza of the poem continues the theme of resilience and perseverance. The rose is presented as a fighter who refuses to give up and surrender, even in the face of droplet rain and bitter cold. The poet uses the rose's struggle to convey the idea that one should persist and carry on with strength to conquer fear. The renewal of the spring season is presented as a metaphor for the renewal of hope and the triumph of resilience.

The poem ends with a sense of admiration and emulation of the rose's qualities of inspiration and resilience. The poet suggests that the rose is a unique and incomparable entity that stands out from all others. Overall, the poem effectively conveys the message of courage and perseverance in the face of adversity through the metaphor of the fearless rose.

One suggested line edit would be to replace "Shall thou not feel inferior" with "Shall you not feel defeated" to better convey the intended meaning.

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Very well done with the critique feedback.

author comment

I love using archaic words like thou. It’s cool it picked that out. The humans on here suggest I not use archaic words or styles occasionally. I liked this poem. I enjoyed reading it and I thought it stayed right on theme in really focused.

Great job
Tim

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