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FIRST LOVE

You are the angel of my life
your smiles awakens the sun rise
your laughter unveils your beauty
you are the star that shines on my face

ever since you came into my life
I found an endless peace and joy
your company was like a family union
staying around me was like a breathe of life

just know I ended this adorable friendship
'cause you're coarse and foul-mouthed bully
I hate to beat a woman due to their feminity
since I can't endure and tolerate your attitude

I decided to end it here and call it off
although your memory keeps a pleasant
tale of your love and kind affection
in all, you were once a sweet heartthrob

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

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in the second line... I think it would be better to use the word (awakens) instead of awakes. a simple mistake easily gotten over. this sounds like a rocky and volatile relationship. best left behind...

*hugs, Cat

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Thank you so much for spotting it out Cat!
Truly, you are an expert here.

I just laughed over this comment: this sounds like a rocky and volatile relationship.
Yes, you are %100 right!

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an ex (former) spert (drip, under pressure!) LOL!!!

*love, Cat

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I am happy you knew what I meant here.

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first love is still the love of my life lol

yours is a fairy tale come to life...it just doesn't get any better than that!!! best to Susan.

*hugs, Cat

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You are truly enjoying. Best of luck Scribbler!

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embroider a good tale
and deviate from the established rules of language"~Jackweb

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