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A fiery plea

Submitted by Edward nigma on Thu, 2022-03-24 18:31

Along the lines
of silk
and satin.
Lies the world
all failed and flattened .
Forgetting all
worldly cares
they frantically
fling out
flares .
Emitting
into the raspy air
a fiery plea .
“ don’t
leave me “

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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One

Fri, 2022-03-25 05:35

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Not sure what your real name is but I saw that using the E from Edward & Nigma as a second name creates - E nigma? I like that!

Great theme, well delivered & punched out into the open.

Stay safe

One.

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"with all that I am & all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me"

Geezer

Fri, 2022-03-25 09:31

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Another amazing piece from the mind of E.nigma ! I admire your tenacity in writing while engaged in a battle that would have most people giving up. One thing I would suggest is that you exchange the word fleet for fling. Keep writing, I look forward to your work. ~ Geez.
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Edward nigma

Fri, 2022-03-25 14:50

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well I was inspired by the old song we’ll have Manhattan by Lorenz hart

https://youtu.be/aYVb64eNdrg

Lorenz hart often rhymes erratically like in the song it says .
I have a cozy little flat in
what is known as old Manhattan .

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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