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stretching gray
 sheet sentinels
  of bush


a symphony of rain
  a brook Rachmaninoff’s
   the cliche of entropy


Pastels of light
 reach canopy
  painting nature
   With one luminous
    golden strand


 crawling nose
  scampers retreat,
   as alien scents
    reach downwind


 Stark flamingo serenade,
  into the pink


the conjuring
of disrobing life,
its peaceful uproar
  cinnamon specks
   waiting future’s call


salt cracks
 from my face
  at my feet

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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I'm nearly done with this one. I know the format can be confronting for some but if you know me I'm never going to colour inside the lines. P.S. I am trying to get the format right I won't try and edit again tonight I've tried multiple times and its 5am here so I'll fix it later today, yes it meant to move across the page in steps but it's not quite right.
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Not Explicit Content


Hello, Seren,
This invites all the senses - and there is wonderful motion here, especially in the use of the single words: observe, listen, know, become, wonder, hope. I would love a little further explanation with the title. I feel that the message is to draw the most out every ounce of every experience in life as possible. "Disrobing life" "Peaceful uproar" - thought provoking language. I know you are still working on this piece, and I look forward to reading it again.
Thank you!

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