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Evolution (according to a robin chick)

You, little robin chick
Resting au nest at solstice
Wing off riding to the music of freedom
Mother shouts erratic verse;
Vocals of ancestry

Don’t even say good-bye
As you land on frond pillows
Return address unknown
Chirping change on a countryside festival

Evening sky, low flight navigation
your future - meandering discoveries
Pass it on…

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I understood all but line 2nd verse fourth line
You my good man have a very cryptic way of writing , that I have yet to understand I know there is something more underlying in your words and that is what puzzles me

Chrys

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this is a metaphor for leaving home and discovering your own way. "Wing off, riding to the music of freedom" "Mother shouts erratic verse; vocals of ancestry" "your future meandering discoveries." I would have thought, that the last line of the 2nd verse, meant: Singing for change at a country-side festival. Sort of like making do with little resources. Anyway, good poem that made me think. I'm not sure that just "Evolution" is right, but at least it goes in the right direction. ~ Geez.
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That sounds about as right as you might get.
~ Geez.
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