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Everything I Have Lost

Everything I have lost
is piling up in front
of me.

My heart is broke
and it's all
because of me.

The tears that fall
from my eyes
won't get a second
glance.

For I am the one who
does these things
that truly make me
sad.

What have I done?
What do I do?
As I sit here writing
this poem to you.

For I have lost
everything
I have even lost you.

Tell the devil not to
worry that
he might see me
real soon.

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Raw emotions as you look inside yourself, one of the hardest things to do. Well done! Glad you have found an outlet for your writing.

~RoseBlack~

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I’m glad you found us. I hope you’re ok. Clearly you’re stating some very difficult emotions about mistakes or behavior pattens and having tremendous feelings of regret. I want you to hear this from a complete stranger: your worth isn’t defined by your past. The poem above is coming from such deep self awareness. That is where you need to look. That is your point of personal growth.

I’m just a stranger in world of 7 billion strangers but I’m here to tell you absolutely and unequivocally; you’ve got this. You’re super talented and I look forward to your next poem.

Hang in there,
Tim

self-discovery is not always pleasant, but it is usually helpful, if you look at it constructively. you have pain in your poem. pain isn't always a bad thing...look at it as growing pains. Great piece of work!

*hugs, Cat

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