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Every Fibre
You inhabited every fibre of my being
Physically emotionally spiritually
From when we met
We were conjoined one body soul and mind
We got under each others skin
We peeled away the layers
until raw humanity melded with raw humanity,
no pretences left
The sum of us was so much more than me and you
We were a new a vibrant entity
Ready to live out our dreams
Conquer any fears
Take on the world
A force to be reckoned with
In all that's good
A self contained unit.
Suddenly you were taken no warning no plan
I live my life using everything you left me to keep going
Muscle memory of your touches our intimacies shared
Your voice of reason I still hear feeling your reassurance when I decide
Your spirit floats around me the calming force that keeps me going
Facing all the things we thought we'd share going it alone
Having to use the words me and I not us and we
a harsh reminder that you are gone when dealing with the world.
But unless a force of nature can strip away my memories
my skin my heart my soul, you are with me forever ingrained in every fibre,
Style / type:
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Lavender
Thu, 2023-03-16 20:03
Every Fibre
Hello, Emerald,
I feel the complete joy, and then I feel the enormous loss. Like most of us, I have experienced both, and you have well defined those feelings with your raw honesty. I love the pace of this poem, the "giving in" to the emotions and letting them flow so freely.
Thank you,
L
Emerald1
Thu, 2023-03-30 02:25
Thank You
Hi , apologies for late reply , I literally havent been on line here in days , thanks for the read and lovely comment , yes that piece dragged up some raw emotion , really appreciate your positive comment
Cheers Em 1
author commentEmerald1
Thu, 2023-03-30 02:29
Thank you
Hi
Apologies for late reply ,literally havent been on line here last while , thank you for reading and your compassionate comment
It was a difficult write but for me who is definitely not a poet I am pleased with it , I usually struggle with titles but that one just arrived !
Cheers Em 1
author commentDalton
Mon, 2023-04-03 14:53
It’s beautiful to experience
It’s beautiful to experience such a unique self affirming love in our short lives. That’s what God intends for us to find and not everyone does I know believe me. A precious homage beloved habibti love John xxx
Emerald1
Mon, 2023-04-03 15:19
Dearest Habibi
Dearest Habibi
Thank you from the bottom of my heart ,you know your comments in appreciation of anything I write simply mean the world to me ,the prompt for that originally just touched something and it sort of wrote itself and was a release of emotions that needed freeing .I know not everyone has such experiences of love ,unfortunately . I really love that you enjoyed the reading experience .
Thank you beloved habibi
Mar xxx
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