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Empty Skies

Submitted by lovedly on Mon, 2021-01-18 21:40

were dry today
the clouds were slow
why no one knows

the sun was out
I stepped in like a clout
the sun said go in
it's still cold
minus seven
do you want to go
early to heaven

don't cry dry your eye
don't be shy
the sun only minds does dry

laugh and stay inside
I will continue the journey
mile, mile by mile for miles

today no snow
I will own the entire sky
and never ask a LEO
ever why

he will never lie
on you his axe apply
Recalls Julius Caesar

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Lavender

Tue, 2021-01-19 22:33

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Hi, Lovedly,
"Empty skies were dry today..." Very intriguing open line. Really like it! I followed along until the reference to Leo (zodiac sign, ruled by the sun?) and the next reference to Julius Caesar. I bet I am missing an important element here...
Thank you!
L

lovedly

Wed, 2021-01-20 11:18

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Sun is the RULER of the world Hence LEO===LIFE GIVING SEX CREATING the FINAL word in all existence
JULIUS CAESAR ==emblem of LOSS
Both months LEO and CANCER emerged after the assassination of Caesar by FRIEND BRUTUS.More later if you ask.

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Lavender

Thu, 2021-01-21 14:37

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Ah, I understand now!
Thank you!
L

lovedly

Thu, 2021-01-21 15:02

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Let others also read and digest
I have more on my plate today

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