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Emotions In Seasons: How I feel and my favorites

December finds me at my hearth
warm-faced, poking up the fire.
Sliding into my favorite chair
book in hand, new worlds inspired.

Outside, snow is softly falling,
accumulating a blanket of white
while I recline dreaming of good wishes,
candles lit on this Yule night.

January, the Sign of the Wolf
meeting with the full moon,
coming together in words and deeds
bring all aspects of life in tune.

Soon, March winds insistently rage
Mother Nature in her frosted gown
gives way to spring's zephyrs
floral scents breeze through my town.

Joys of June brings our anniversary
and celebration for the day of his birth.
Happiness floods this month of my redemption
vast wealth of his affection, not a dearth.

Finally comes the Autumn months, stillness reigns
gathering on All Hallows Eve, eventide of All Saint's Day.
Feelings of awe overcome me, in between night and day,
quiet observance in shadows, keeping the hounds at bey!

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I thought you're doing great here with your perception of the four seasons and how do your emotions go from one to another. The contest asked for your emotions at your favorite one, but you were really successful to make us, the readers, feel like every season is special for you.
A winner entry indeed!
Best wishes dear and
thank you for sharing

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thank you for reading my little escape from everyday living/problems into what I feel in my heart and spirit. I appreciate your reading and response :) thank you so much for your time and attention.

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the meter gets rough here and there, I am appreciative of the story and the way you have gone through the moods and the seasons. Nice work. ~ Geez.
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I would deeply appreciate your thoughts on how to clean this up...I wrote from my heart and not my head...so if you have any suggestions, I would be both intrigued and grateful to entertain them.

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Poetically energetic and powerful imagery " January the sign of the wolf"!

How wonderful is your eloquence, pouring into my voids, creativity overflowing and flourishing with sincerity and distinction. Very beautiful.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

I am always energized when I read your comments. you have a knack of making people happy! it is good to hear from you!

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This is my feel of the ryhthm and meter here:

Add a comma after hand.
Delete the [with] and add a [d] to inspire,
the word is strong enough that the extra [d] won't affect it.

Leave off the [ly] on velvet or leave out the word velvet altogether,
Say lit instead of alight, and say most holy night or [on this Yule night].

[To bring] instead of bringing

Delete [me] the rest of the line is fine

Get rid of the [and] use a comma, stillness reigns

Gather on Allhallow's eve, eventide of All Saint's Day
Feelings of awe come over me, in separation of night and day
quiet observance in shadows, keeping the hounds at bey!

Thank you for the punctuation, it helped guide me here.

Title's good, the language is better, and the theme very nice.
As always, the suggestions are to use or not, it's your work!
I hope this helps. Good luck, ~ Geez.
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thank you for giving this poem a good glance over and offering suggestions. I agree with all of them and will employ them when I get on-line tomorrow.I'm out of energy (spoons)

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you are getting the hang of rhyming, although you claim it not! ~ Geez.
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but delete
OUTSIDE
it always snows outside
to me it appears redundant
but
velvet would or may be better .....
may c
all d best
Now I don't
Contest

I appreciate your assistance, but in this case, "outside" is an event. thank you, and *hugs, Cat

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That’s a lot of ground to cover in 6 stanzas. As always you’ve got a pretty refined poem here. This one is really tight and flowing. A nice meandering dream through the seasons of your mind.

Love it
Tim

thank you, but I cannot take all the credit, as Geezer helped a great deal in smoothing it out. thank you for reading this and commenting!

;) Cat

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As are you. I’ll forget that time you roasted me for starting lines with conjunctions, which I now think about every time I write and I look for it in other people’s writing as well.

you have a much more gentle touch than I. you deliver your observations with thoughtfulness it is your nature. I deliver like a sledge hammer. I admire your tactful ways . I shall try to be more like you.

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This particular poem is similar to my writing at least in rhythm and rhyme. I think it feels like home to me; the chambers of my psyche, if you take my meaning. Geezer is also similar in that way and like I said he’s good with helping out. I urge you to both continue to be unapologetically yourselves. I also do like to think I’ve got a trick or two I can teach through my writing.

Again, nice job. I really like this little story. I learned a lot about you from 24 lines.

Tim

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for all you are and all you will learn to be...you are ours, now and we are your family! a rag-tag group of poets.

*H & L, Cat

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I am really only fond of one season, the one that makes me look normal even if it is only for a couple of months! Great job!

~RoseBlack~

dear Carrie, you have made me smile.

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Thus is a wonderful poem, is winter your favourite season cosseting in the warmth of the cold months? I only ask because it was the only season with more than one stanza? I think your language use was on point. I can't see anything I'd change. I thoroughly enjoyed the read I would love to hibernate in the winter before a blazing fire, I love the feeling of nesting in the warm months maybe one day I'll get to experience that snowy isolation.

Brava!!!

Love you Sis xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

yes it is when we have an operating fireplace. this year it is not so. we are waiting for repairs. the company near us is overbooked. I also love the Autumn moths leading up to Candlemas (a pagan/wiccan holiday.) thank you for reading this and responding. I love sharing things with you!

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you have completely changed the whole poem; I will assume that you weren't satisfied with what you had.
So, here are a few things that I thought would help. I would change 2nd line of stanza two, to read:

It accumulates a new blanket of white, or
Accumulating a blanket of white

[meeting] with the full moon?

Delete [thoughts]

bring[s]?

giv[ing] delete [as] from end of line

Delete [a] from line: vast wealth of his affection, [not] a dearth

Feelings of awe overcome me, in [between night and day]?

I think that it is just a matter of a little adjustment of meter
to make this great poem!

You know that these are just my suggestions, you can use or discard any or all.
P.S. thanks for the punctuation! LoL You CAN do it, but you decide if you really need it or not.
~ Geez.
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I'm pretty lazy today, but I will give your suggestions due diligence. soon, I hope you know I appreciate the time and energy you put into your critiques? you are a peach! thank you, Geez!

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I know how much you appreciate my critiques, and I will always give it my best shot. I just love having such good work to work with! Love and hugs back ~ Geez.
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