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Emotions in Seasons (Difficult Feelings)

Standing alone
Brittle and cold
Like the winter wind
Rattling my bones

You made me think
You made me feel
And now what I thought was right
Doesn't feel right at all

I want to love you
I want to push you away
I want to believe everything you say
I'm afraid you won't stay

Standing alone
Watching the snow
I'm beginning
To not like the cold at all

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Free verse
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Not Explicit Content

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it probably isn't meant as how I took it. I was put in mind of my greatest fear: Abandonment! I have weekly nightmares about being abandoned. wonderfully dark poem!

*ever, eddy
*hugs, Cat

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Yes- there is an element of abandonment in there. There are many difficult feelings in this poem. When you have been dead inside for so long and start feeling again, it can be overwhelming for so many reasons!

~RoseBlack~

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I can understand that, as I spent about ten years with a locked heart, one night stands, crazy stunts, and letting that cold direct my actions, I was cruel to those who tried... then I met Steven and I knew he was the one who could thaw my frozen heart. it took a lot of energy to be in protection mode for so long. these lines resonate:

I want to love you
I want to push you away
I want to believe everything you say
I'm afraid you won't stay

*truly, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

I am not alone. Thank you for the supportive comments.

~RoseBlack~

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Healing hurts. It’s difficult because it involves pointing the finger at oneself. That’s not “beating oneself up” but an honest assessment of your feelings, why you have them when you have them (identifying triggers), and enacting some strategies to cope in a manor that isn’t self destructive or immobilizing to the ego.

I’m here if you wanna talk,
Tim

Take you up on that sometime. Thank you!

~RoseBlack~

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I can pick your emotions one by one from the whole poem. I believe your husband could feel your emotions as well. I understand your feelings in this piece!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

This was not written for my husband..that ship sailed a long time ago. Glad you could feel the emotions!

~RoseBlack~

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I can pick your emotions one by one from the whole poem. I believe your husband could feel your emotions as well. I understand your feelings in this piece!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Whatever triggered this piece. I hope hard feelings and bad times shall leave by the end of the year and been replaced by healthier relations and better times.
I should say that this is an excellent entry for the contest. The overwhelming mixed feelings, coldness, the brittle bones, wow! How expressive is this piece.
Pls. be safe dear and take care.
And you better win the conrest with this one, just saying;-)

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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Thank you for the high praise. There are so many emotions that went into this piece. I am glad you feel this was a good choice.

~RoseBlack~

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Actually I almost panic that there will be a heartbreaking
but thank God that's doesn't happened this is a very nice and cool feeling

Thank you for the comment and the read!

~RoseBlack~

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Hi, there, Carrie,
The use of the word "brittle" moved me the most. It conveys so much emotion. I hope we soon read of stronger, warmer thoughts and feelings in your poetry. Best wishes to you.
L

There are warm feelings but they are conflicted and overpowered by the other feelings. Maybe I will melt totally over time.

~RoseBlack~

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you are you, and whatever you do, however you do it, you shall remain you. and we love you.

*hugs & love, Cat
*ever, eddy

*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

That means a lot

~RoseBlack~

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I found this poem enjoyable and relatable. Nice work.

"To fly is to fall."

Thank you for the read and comment.

~RoseBlack~

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Thank you everyone

~RoseBlack~

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dear Carrie. Well done dear. Well deserved indeed!

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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Your high praise and confidence in this piece means so much!

~RoseBlack~

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This is a very moving piece. Very well done.
L

Glad you enjoyed

~RoseBlack~

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This is really nice I like it
Well done poet

For the comment and the read

~RoseBlack~

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