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Embers (repost) revised
Embers
I am changed...
inside,
where it matters.
my delicious secret
growing,
in the deepest
darkened part of me.
alive within
the tender start of me
a tiny ember
glowing...
this fragile
precious spark!
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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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punctuation added.
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Northwestern Wisconsin USA
Favorite Poets
Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda and many more.
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Michael Anthony
Sun, 2022-07-24 12:04
Outstanding poem CW! One of
Outstanding poem CW! One of the best I've seen on NP! I really enloyed this insightful description of the origin of inner change - well done!
I am changed
inside
where it matters
the tender start of me
a tiny ember
glowing...
this fragile
precious spark
- Brilliant open and close!
Michael Anthony
Candlewitch
Sun, 2022-07-24 12:20
dear Michael,
there are many things that can bring about this kind of change. thank you for recognizing my poem for what i is! i very much appreciate you.
*hugs, Cat
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author commentRosewood Apothecary
Sun, 2022-07-24 12:29
Absolutely gorgeous
Profound as can be. Spark indeed!
You nailed it,
Tim
P.S. really, really impressed with this one. Holy cow!
Candlewitch
Sun, 2022-07-24 16:08
dear Tim,
"and another one bites the dust"... thank you so much...that's two for two!
*warm hugs, Cat
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author commentRosewood Apothecary
Sun, 2022-07-24 12:37
Toot my own horn
But this reminds me of some lyrics from one of my songs entitled “Fine”
“Just yesterday I was divided in the dark
You know I kinda thought that I might be blind
That’s when it came to me, that’s when I watched it spark
I took one step and left that s**t behind.”
And I did, a few times, since I wrote that song 18 years ago.
You really grabbed at something deep here and it spoke volumes to me. What a super-duper poem.
Magic,
Tim
Candlewitch
Sun, 2022-07-24 16:10
;)
Magic indeed!
*hugs, Cat
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author commentDalton
Sun, 2022-07-24 17:01
Dearest Cat
Certainly it's what we know about ourselves deep inside that makes us what we are man/woman how we evolve over time or in the form of an epiphany if we're on the wrong road a self destructive path due to an ancient pain a wound that never healed. Through your poetry you can try and in some small way heal the world. Thanks for sharing your gift hugs John :):):)
Candlewitch
Mon, 2022-07-25 08:46
thank you, dearest friend,
it is good for me to read your view on my poem. I'm glad that you don't think of me as some dewy-eyed girl in love with the moon and stars. I know I can always count on you for support.
*love, your friend, Cat
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author commentDalton
Mon, 2022-07-25 16:07
Dearest Cat
I know your poems are never twee or dewyeyed I feel the pain beneath the words I'm sorry to say :):):)
Candlewitch
Mon, 2022-07-25 16:15
dearest John,
thank you... I don't think I can find the words to tell you how much you mean to me.
*love, Cat
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author commentDalton
Thu, 2022-07-28 17:11
Dearest Cat
Please think about sharing this poem with us on All Poetry :):):)
Candlewitch
Thu, 2022-07-28 18:07
ok
it is time for me to quit the computer today. but I will post it tomorrow, my good friend.
*love, Cat
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author commentRoseBlack
Mon, 2022-07-25 17:35
A Poem of Transformation
Even the tiniest change can bring about the most magical things! Wonderful write :)
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Candlewitch
Thu, 2022-07-28 09:36
thank you RoseBlack,
I knew I could count on you for understanding,
*hugs, Cat
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author commentBrian W Taylor
Mon, 2022-07-25 18:23
HI! I am new here. I need
HI! I am new here. I need friends:)
I really like this. It is the kind of writing that instantly invokes an image in my mind, in this case the tiny ember of course. Keep smouldering until you are on fire!
RoseBlack
Mon, 2022-07-25 18:29
Hi Brian
Welcome to Neopoet! We are glad to have you aboard. Have you had the opportunity to visit our contests page as well as our Stream?
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Candlewitch
Thu, 2022-07-28 09:39
Hi Bri!!!
it is very nice to meet you! I hope to red your poetry too! see ya around the site.
*hugs, Cat
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author commentRay Whitaker
Fri, 2022-07-29 16:19
Poetry expression seems to come naturally to you
You write well. Really.
Is this a new poem?
I'd like to see this in a stanza form you choose, rather than a blank line in between every written line.
IMHO, this would make your expression more powerful.
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Candlewitch
Sat, 2022-07-30 06:12
dear Ray,
I just added punctuation to the poem. thank you for the compliment. I know you are very choosy about giving them out, which makes it very special.
*hugs, Cat
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