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Electrification

Paratonics
Hammer-ons
Pull-offs
Power-chords
Blind fury, as my finger blaze on nickle-wound Ernie Balls
Pandora set to 'Rock Radio'
Sweet Child of Mine
Nickelback
Staind
Bon Jovi
All float through, and erase my memory
Sweat drains from my pores
along with it, the ability to give a fuck about anything
The Fender screams in my place
and my heart lightens
my eyes open
and I see the day in a new light

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Last few words: 
Motivation and focus: Completely autobiographical. I often pick up the guitar and play to the classic rock/rock stations on Pandora radio. Tonight was a mix of Bon Jovi, etc. I felt better, and switched over to the calm of Antoine Dufour and Don Ross, before working on a couple pieces that I've written.
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Comments

as my fingers(plural)
sounds like ou were blowing off steam in this one

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

I read it as a bad night in a hospital emergency room!

It reads quite different now, but a superb example to me of how poetry is really anarchistic. Even if you sell books the poetry is no longer yours, it belongs to your reader. Property is not a word that can be applied to poetry.

cheers,
Jess
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Your poem makes me hunger to be able to play music along with my favorite artists. Alas... having not the raw talent, I will have to be content to just listen and let the notes and words wash over me.

All float through, and erase my memory
Sweat drains from my pores
along with it, the ability to give a fuck about anything

always, Cat (& eddy)

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worth over a grand now to collectors
cant play a tune..just to hold it
was mesmerizing and play G and F
only chords I know!!
Tube amps they say are best
and Les Paul was a genuise

I know musicians

I listen to Pantera and songs like "Fuel my Fire"
etc
Love Staind

great poem about being in the moment for music
its like writing poetry
not as exciting maybe!!

you make this rock!!

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