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Ekaterina The Bold by: eddy styx

laying restlessly on her cot
moaning, twisting and turning,
responding to an unseen threat
bathed in sweat, her body burning.

touching her shoulder
to wake her seemed prudent.
while crooning reassurance
from master to student.

while I bandaged her wounds I pondered
placing a cool cloth on her head,
it was the purest of luck, finding her
she had been injured and left for dead.

she wasn't just a soldier but a warrior
with many confirmed kills under her belt,
she never bragged or talked of her dead
holding it inside never telling what she felt.

she was the best of all I had trained
never complaining, helpful to those
younger and less trained in her group
wearing the mark of a novices clothes.

under my tender administrations
consciousness was reclaimed, seeing
gratitude on her face and questioning eyes
asking after the wounded and their well being.

quickly taking up her attack weapon, thanking me
before going out the door to find her group
her mind set on the battle out upon the field
anxious to matter and rejoin her fighting troop.

a machine gun had taken most of her fellows
they lay all about, dead or dying on the ground,
she laid waste to several nests going down fighting
when it was over, the smoke had cleared without a sound.

her name was Ekaterina and she couldn't be found
posthumously she was decorated with awards for her fall.
her demise couldn't be proven, as she'd jumped for the trees,
some say she made it out, what she stood for was freedom for all!

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asking after the wounded and there (their) well being.

her mind set on the battle out (upon) the field
anxious to matter and rejoin her fighting (troop?)

A few corrections and a suggestion.

Nice work,
Tim

I've taken care of it. thanks for the read+

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This embraces her fighting, passionate spirit beautifully. She is a wonderful addition to Neo. Well done.

~RoseBlack~

I very much appreciate you reading my work and commenting on it.

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I had hoped this write would entertain you. I am glad it has ;)

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Funny I just read and commented on Ekaterina's untitled poem and come to this. After reading just one of her poems I think you've captured her spirit beautifully. The Warrior Freedom fighter.

Beautiful tribute hon. I think you're showing the softer gentler side of Eddy. Wonderful!!!..

Love and hugs J xx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

most people don't notice that I wait, watch and then write... these are beautiful vibrant people. you are very observant! thanks for reading and commenting ;)

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