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Dream Garden

Submitted by Rosewood Apothecary on Wed, 2022-06-29 06:55

We dream beneath a blanket of stars
The vastness of which approaches infinite
I reach up and pluck the brightest one
And place it in your collection basket

Hold this dream for me my dearest
In such case as I forget it
For waking minds our dreams do trample
And leave us full of false regrets

Plant it in your hearts’ green garden
With care and light so it may grow
A fledgling universe of dreams
Like all the other seeds we’ve sown

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Candlewitch

Wed, 2022-06-29 07:06

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I have no criticism. it is a lovely poem from start to finish it speaks of your mutual adoration and what you share. may many strong, healthy seeds grow in the garden of your life's planning. may you only water it with tears of joy...

my favorite lines are:

Plant it in your hearts green garden
With care and light so it may grow
A fledgling universe of dreams
Like all the other seeds we’ve sown

with admiration, Cat

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Rosewood Apothecary

Wed, 2022-06-29 07:55

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High praise. Thanks!

Tim

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Geezer

Wed, 2022-06-29 08:17

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and succinct. Nice job, not sure, but possibly the best I've seen from you. ~ Geezer.
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Rosewood Apothecary

Wed, 2022-06-29 09:27

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High praise. Thanks for all your support.

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Jackweb

Wed, 2022-06-29 09:51

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outstanding artistry!
Apt yet beautiful.

I have no expression of disapproval.

"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Words.unwritten

Wed, 2022-06-29 10:32

Amazing ...really beautiful x x

One

Thu, 2022-06-30 03:24

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an clever, image soaked, atmospheric & emotional write. No critique required.

You allow the reader to view the scene you've crafted through their own eyes.

regards

One.

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"with all that I am & all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me"

Rosewood Apothecary

Thu, 2022-06-30 04:53

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Thanks. This place has been an absolute gift. I’m really very grateful to found acceptance in this community.

Tim

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lovedly

Wed, 2022-07-06 19:57

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I keep thinking The best stanza Cat's has pinned it I was going to
I have many a dream
hope you would love to be a participant
of my imagery
I am not a poem
but am a byte
of poetree
soon a megabyte
may be

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