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Don't stay lonely

Submitted by lovedly on Tue, 2014-08-19 21:51

I beg to disagree

Life, single and lonely
is like a palm tree
high above the beach
in the sky
neither bears fruit,
nor shares shade
ere in the tsunami of life
it finally fades

life is like wise

Feel for yourself
as a butterfly
in a flame
it also to find love tries
but it dies

so we must also give
our love a chance
where in we cherish
life's romance

a single bird
can be lonely
never a summer
it can ever
bring for thee

will your isolatary vision
change ye!

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

Rula

Tue, 2014-08-19 22:17

Though I believe

That we need sometime off of everything mundane, but not a too long one.
I loved the examples that you've used. Especially the first. I thought it supurb.

Life, single and lonely
is like a palm tree
high above the beach
in the sky
neither bears fruit nor shares shade
ere in the tsunami of life it finally dies

isolatary [isolation?]

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