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don't bother me

Don't bother me

In rainy forest
you'll find me breathing
around me are distances
between trees then
we are going to meet
nearby the abandoned lake
and you won't speak.

Then I'm gonna be turning silence
into glittering crystals
while the sea tells me
that birds always come back
from south.

''There's no silence
it's louder than anything
and almost everyone
has collapsed in it.'', he answers.

''Don't you dare
to threaten me any more
with the place I know!'', I shout.

I'm no longer jealous of water
I'm a girl dancing
underneath the lights
outside is a cold night
so similar to myself
and so sure I'm not going out
although I admire her.

This bird spreaded her wings
as much as she could imagine
first glance was delicious
but then as they were too heavy
she started to fall down.

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Welcome to Neopoet the workshop.
I found this interesting to read, it was like reading of a secret affair.
I especially liked these two lines:

"nearby the abandoned lake
and you won't speak."

I just thought of some where off the beaten road secluded
Nice work.
Feel free to join the workshops and read other peoples poem and please comment it's a way of learning.

Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

No doubt I'm gonna put here some more poems and I would like you to read it and I'm gonna read poems on this site and comment of course and thx ;)

I LIVE IN THE NOW TOO AT LEAST I WOULD LIKE TO :D

Emina
Maybe it's better to stay completely within
as fire hides in metal
as water hides in rock.
Rumi

author comment

outstretched
this is a place for newer poets
like me
and now ye

loved

I love my wings hope you like yours too since you're loved

Emina
Maybe it's better to stay completely within
as fire hides in metal
as water hides in rock.
Rumi

author comment

and yes
my wings are spread wide
and anyone with me can go for a flying ride
thanks for ur note

loved

Welcome to Neopoet, I hope that your walk with us through the love of words will teach us both.
Your write seems to come from your thoughts, and as I do sometime write this deep it sometimes needs a little meeting with the outside world in the way you arrange your talks in your poetry.
As with this Stanza:-

Then I'm gonna be turning silence
into glittering crystals
while the sea tells me
that birds always come back
from south.

This is where your thoughts run too fast for the words and description.

Times when I turn within myself
The glittering crystals are my silence
While I walk where the sea tells me
That the birds always return from the south.

The picture changes not sure if clearer but just more things to draw people into your thoughts.
Lovely work and will look forward to reading much more,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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