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docents: the unkown global ambition

another aged vanity
another baby grand
another california king

these hovels each
a museum becomes
all replicated



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stuck on this one right now. it's about how so many people use homes to project the image they desire to be. it feels to broad and unspecific but, at the same time, almost every home i see is just the same thing over and over. anyhting will help. please feel free.
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It seems stupid to have a house that doesn't seem to have been lived in.
Wonder where they keep the dust or the stains from a spilt drink of days ago, do they live there???
Is it a home or just an environmental shell that they cannot use.
These places what are they for, I can imagine just before I visit that they throw everything into a spare room that no one sees, or they have given you an address that is used by all their neighbours when having visitors,
that is kept in perfect order????? The mind Boggles lol
There are many stories to be told on this theme yet, yours just an inroad to be explored, Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

to personalise, make the reader realise it is about the fatuousness and often appalling taste with which people try to express themselves in their home/environment.

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