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Divided We Stand

Submitted by Shelby Pryor on Sat, 2023-01-21 00:02

My opinion is wrong
And yours is right
My views are better
I've seen the light

You just don't get it
You're stupid and dumb
Your hurtful words
Make my heart numb

Don't we see we're tearing down
What we are made to repair
We don't have to agree, we won't
But that doesn't mean we can't care

The world's getting darker by the day
What happened to "together we'll band?"
In this day and time, nothing is united
Our motto has become Divided We Stand

Style / type:

Structured: Western

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

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Editing stage:

Editing - polished draft

Contest:

Neopoem Of The Year 2022

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Clobro

Wed, 2023-01-25 13:57

Nice

You have a typo at Youjust don't get it.
Also there are some double spaces.
Aside from the formatting, it's a good poem! I agree with the message. Even if other people's opinions are different, they still deserve love.

Shelby Pryor

Wed, 2023-01-25 16:22