it is very nice to meet you, welcome to Neopoet site! if you have any questions please ask me and I will try to answer to the best of my knowledge. if I can't answer, I will find someone who can.
I like your poem, I think it is a great beginning. I would like to see what it could become if you would expand it. what yo have here is a tasty bite for more...

*hugs, Cat

Welcome to neopoet community!
This is a family of poets around the world.And everyone's piece of work receives critique and feedback.

Your poetry would be better as you continue staying here, different corrections and comments on your piece will help you a lot. Only accept their advices, feedback and apply it.

Definitely you will see the best version of your self as you continue writing.

wait for a couple of minutes, if you do not see your post right away! It sometimes takes a minute or two to show up.
As the rest have said; I enjoyed the little tidbit that you put out there. I only hope that you give us more than a taste next time. ~ Geezer.
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