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DEARTH

The solitary sunlight
has plunged into
the arid desert
now severely
lacks vegetation
This drought time
that has pounced
on this plain
shall be the
last straw
that broke
the camel's
back.

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

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I like your title, it is sparse, like the poem. the flow is god. I'm a fan and advocate of free verse. your language usage is good. your words echo the way I have felt before , so I understand . keep writing. good work.

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I also liked your perspective. Indeed, you have a bird's-eye view. Many thanks for this review.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

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Hi, Jackweb,
Such a vivid description - I can feel the intensity of the heat, and see the stark lack of vegetation. Witty, yet still a dramatic final line. A very appropriate title.
Lav

You have a wonderful comments here. Thanks very much.
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