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Dare bare her ....she says

Bare her she says

If only you added a smile
she shows her swollen eyes

you'd love to live bare
in beauty and style

others would longingly
at your body stare
and
or
but
of it be aware

this damned world
doesn't care
they lay you in their lair
thread bare

be aware
don't guys dare.....
they afterwards what happens
really don't care!

But don't get scared....

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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This is a little cryptic but has the bones for a great write.
The theme is fine now put some meat on those Bones, Yours Ian..

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Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

ere alone
they
theirs beat
else I shall retreat

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No one knows who you are where you are just a write that comes through in verse, Not good..
Come on join in you have been here long enough to know that the ones that are out spoken and known get all the comments and join that elite club where ever it is lol.
Hope to know more about you one day, Yours Ian..

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

some day
thanks
anon poets
r the best
u know it
so does Jess

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I like the cryptic writes of yours
a lot of them are very forward
which is okay..Your style..
But then every so often u put up\
these ones.....
which I find very interesting!
salted with truths
and some desire
and the mystery
to make it interesting

Thank U Lovedly!

you dazzlingly marvel me
I am a poetry
a poem
a poet
UNEEK
OK
QUE.....

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