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From Daddy with Love

Daddy still loves me

After 1969
you have returned
hope daddy still loves you

a friend wrote to me
past time
is now no time
future time has yet to happen
what is the time
is this very moment

I am typing you are reading
in seconds this too
has become history

so each next moment
be happier will thee

this moment has become
a past so quickly

did you not observe it

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Free verse
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" After 1969 you have returned ",
The lines are of good quality we welcome the unique wording you see
I must confess I was taken back in the impulse of this piece brought everything together
Someday soon we shall see your name in lights we thirst for more,
" A friend wrote to me " given rise to shine on an exceptional piece.

Mario Vitale

than I really do deserve
some may strike
beware there are machine guns hidden in poetric jungles
but it's nice to become a target
then at least my name will shine
as someone here said
poetry alone is my breath

Mario I see most people hanker
but now not me
another site is running by automation
and 1000 plus read me daily
and still giving standing ovation

Thanks to guys/poets like thee
we mostly all are wee.

''" After 1969 you have returned ",
The lines are of good quality we welcome the unique wording you see
I must confess I was taken back in the impulse of this piece brought everything together
Someday soon we shall see your name in lights we thirst for more....'''

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