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Count On Me
Count on Me
love's passionate summations
compounding interest appreciation
accounts balancing inflation
affections performed enumeration
together we are amalgamated
happily diversified!
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words:
another poem from the Mirror/rorriM manuscript.
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Comments
Rula
Thu, 2012-06-28 00:18
Then the market of Love shall flourish
dear Cat..Wonderful little piece.
sometimes less is more but you've really wet my appetite for more
Seems an easy equation isn't it? But few hearts are aware of
You have this cleverly done indeed
❤❤❤❤❤❤
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Candlewitch
Thu, 2012-06-28 10:57
LOL!
Thank you sweet Rula! From my choice of words, you might think a banker wrote them, lol.
always, Cat
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Roscoe Lane
Thu, 2012-06-28 02:54
The same,
The same feelings only different ways of showing, but very much a union. beautifully put poem. Love roscoe..
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
Candlewitch
Thu, 2012-06-28 10:59
Thank You Roscoe,
I'm glad you enjoyed my little love poem! Thanks for visiting.
love, Cat
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judyanne
Thu, 2012-06-28 11:15
lol cat
a perfect valentines card for an accountant lover :)
clever use and rhyme of multisyllable words
- you know, if you're feeling better you could still try one of the exercises in the workshop
- it is still open
hugs
judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Candlewitch
Fri, 2012-06-29 11:46
Dear Judy,
Thank you for reading and commenting. Glad you liked it! I'm feeling better but I still don't have much energy available. Thanks for the invite, though.
love, Cat
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loved
Thu, 2012-06-28 11:40
A lovely small finacial equation of love with fixed deposit
kind of interest...
more you save
more you will gain
but in actual love
you ought to remain
in order to
attain a manifold gain....
loved
Candlewitch
Fri, 2012-06-29 11:47
:)
Thank you, Loved.
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loved
Thu, 2012-06-28 12:10
hiddensecrets will soon come out in the openbut when??that's .QS
1.
My dreams are running rampant
but dreams must so flow
in commotion..
intermixed with no relation
utter confusion..
then only another
FREUD will be born
to give a meaningful interpretation
a long one and hollow
no more will FOLLOW
all guys and gals now a days play
with toys...
and physical love,
they prefer to swallow...
2.we all get locked
some within
some without
and
the lover who promises,
but falls out
its a doubt
whether he too can
safely freely live without
3.child abuse doesn't normally produce ,
lest the child is over fourteen...
Child abuse doesn't normally produce, lest the child is over fourteen ...
but it does in abundance
rains shame
on both the abuser and abused
the abuser wipes off his ....
but the one who is abused
simply ask of him /her
their life becomes
eternally obtuse.
4.A lovely small financial equation
of love with fixed deposit
kind of interest...
more you save
more you will gain
but in actual love
you ought to remain
in order to
attain,
a manifold gain....
loved
Candlewitch
Fri, 2012-06-29 11:51
Dear Loved,
Thank you for the thoughts and poems.
always, Cat
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loved
Fri, 2012-06-29 14:26
GREAT you read them
and thanks
loved
Candlewitch
Thu, 2012-07-05 11:27
Dear Lonnie,
with this poem, I tried something different with hopes to amuse. Thank you for reading.
:)
always, Cat
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