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A Conversations With Pops

Submitted by Apostolos "Paul... on Sat, 2012-01-28 10:55

I had a conversation the other day
About a part of my life best forgotten
My father spoke to me and I listened attentively

The sweaty palms dry to the sound of his calm voice
Is he being sincere or saving a man filled with fear
He told me how I silenced doctors, and specialists
How I overcame their predictions by leaps and bounds

The sun was drinking its coffee as the news anchor spoke
We paid no attention as my father verbally motivated
A son that didn’t only impress but left so many speechless
College for me was not in my destiny, oh folks continued testing me

If I don’t attempt to aspire than why waste the breath
No matter our maker we are all given a blank page
Some have a few words written as for me they weren’t worth quitting

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Geezer

Sun, 2012-01-29 07:52

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forward to the polished draft on this one. I'm not sure how to make that last line fit. Maybe if you say:
There are some that have a few written, I don't have many, but I'm not quitting. ~ Gee

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wesley snow

Tue, 2012-01-31 21:22

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... not offered to fully understand. I had a little trouble with it. I'm not the fastest on the uptake and I think I missed something. Nothing wrong with the poetry though.
wesley

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weirdelf

Tue, 2012-01-31 22:12

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would round this poem out nicely. This is a bold suggestion, but it might give you a thread or thought
Some have a few words written
mine were in code, finally broken

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